Everybody knows.
They hear in your prayers
silent voices, that stop
you, right where you stand,
staring out to sea.
Everybody sees
the scars that bare your soul,
in the light of morning
and touch eyes, so full
of Sorrow’s darkness.
Everybody knows,
the words you softly speak,
eyes closed tightly against
black, that caresses
all atrocities.
Everybody sees
your broken body lie,
disassembled, by your
thoughts, scouring a pit
of mournful anguish.
Still unsure of the title what do you think?
JC
I have looked again at this work and I think The Push sounds like the things in the poem are happening to the author by everyone, that they are responsible for how the author is feeling and hence how the reader responds. Carried Away could give the same reading or it could be saying that the author has some control over it but is choosing to let it happen to them - so giving the reader a different feeling towards the author.
ReplyDeleteI am not sure this makes sense but still a wonderful poem and so glad to see it on CP. Can I put a couple of Haiku up as well.
Also in light of last years events should we slightly re design CP, rename to new name and start a new push to put up work on it.
What do you and Lennie think?
Mog